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Blood red lips conceal the fangs,
for love or lust, the hunger pangs,
one soft incision, one moment of bliss,
grow limp to the lure of the vampire kiss

Stalk the night in search of prey,
Live in shadow, Sleep by day,
Clothe the world in drapes of dark,
Dead lips scream - enduring; hark!

For love is lost where life is too,
Together apart, romance askew,
A cold embrace, a withered heart,
A resentful love, one cannot impart

Trapped in a corpse, roaming the Earth,
Devoid of humanity, Robbed of all mirth,
To be immortal means to never be free,
Of the torment of life, never rested will be.
A fairly short vampire poem I wrote for an ex-gf, first poem I've written in years and it definitely won't be the last xx
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smartguy776 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
Love this!
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iamacooldude17534 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
im a vamp and I blushed reading this poem :D it describes so much...
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RockerRainMarie Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is really good :)
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RadRav3n Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
there is no word to say how awesome this poem is.
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01HatsuneMikuo Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
Very, very amazing. <3
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Katniko Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
wow, your poems are spellbinding^^ :heart: they say a picture is worth a hundred words well you just mastered a few simple ryhms into a picture its amazing^^
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Redropp Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
very beautiful.
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hippyJess Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
great poem!
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FlawlessNobody Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2011  Student Digital Artist
It's very beautiful. Good poem. I'm very enchanted by vamps, (Though I'm not a fan of Twilight) and your ex-gf should be proud. I didn't really know that guys were into poetry.
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darkest912 Featured By Owner May 14, 2011
wow this is like in my top 10 fav poems.
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CallMeLunatik2 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Keep up the great work!
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animegirlvamp Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2010
that was awsome great job
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AsaRawr Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2010  Student General Artist
If I could favorite this a million times, I would... *_*
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MistressVampy Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
I featured this on my journal [link]
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SanguineAsperso Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2009
"Hark" seems to be a bit of a forced rhyme. I know from experience that "dark" is a very difficult word to rhyme.
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Erszebet9 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009
this was your first poem?? great job!! I LOVE IT
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xShatterDx Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2009   Photographer
loves it ^.^
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mewmelody232 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2009
AWSOME i love it
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DazedNConfused27 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009
Great poem!

I loved the flow and rhymes.

To be immortal means to never be free,
Of the torment of life, never rested will be.

Is a very true, and just all around great line.
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xxxDeath-By-Sleepxxx Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
no doubt this is the work of a true artist.

but now i'm unsure if you're a vampire as well lol :lmao:

anyway :+fav:
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angeloftheday Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2009
love it. It has everything the happness, sadness of being a vampire.
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Saatanavaltaherra Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2009
good job i really like the rhyme scheme in this
very well written
good vernacular.....
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:iconragondavis:
ragondavis Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008
absolutely amazing!!!! wonderful job.
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Moideathangel Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2008
nice job:) Love the way the message is portrayed
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PhantomThiefVier Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2008
I think I just felt a shiver run down my spine...
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moirrigain Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
wow, it's really good,
I'm speechless......
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:iconviolent-vixen:
Violent-Vixen Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2008
I really love this!
My heart sank when I read it.
The raw emotion and the way you've worded it is like music to my ears :)
:love:
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Seathismycat Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2008
Very well done
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DeviantArtist-Eileen Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2008
I really liked it!
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DarkDaughtersAndSons Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2008
Nice!!!!
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Hardcore-Cupcake Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2008
i'v used this in my deviation with the vampire ^_^
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Psychopath696 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2008
Nice!
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NeuroticLust Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my. That is good.
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diresphinx Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
True of all the vampires' anguish that i know. It's so sad, yet romantic and powerful all at once. I shall always adore Lestat, Quinn and those beautiful immortals
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27vampyresinhermind Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2008   Photographer
as well this shouldn't be your last! it's beautiful and i don't normally like this particular rhyme scheme. great job
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VampireKight180 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008
i loooooooved it!!!!!!!!!!
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queenshadows Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2008   Writer
i think its very interesting i loved the last part
(To be immortal means to never be free,
Of the torment of life, never rested will be.)
i think you're 100% right i never thought of that i dont think anyone every thought of that
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JaeWriter13 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2008  Hobbyist Artist
wow this is amazing!
*kneels intotal amazementt*
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MovieStarz-14 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2008
I love this!!! It reminds me of the book Twilight!!! :love:
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Hairdowntohisknee Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2008
Wow!
Do you mind if I use a stanza of this is in a wallpaper??
I'll credit you for it and put a link to your profile.
Please?
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xXVampirexGirlXx Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008
Thats absolutely beautiful! The most beautifull thing I have ever heard! It all flows naturally and uses wonderfull words that fits perfectly.
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harajukuboy Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2008
i really like it
keep up the good work
=]
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elf-arrow Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2008
awesome.

just...wow...

i do so love the rhyming, it doesn't seem forced, it just flows...

and the images you can create...

*incredibly impressed*
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parisbound-11 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2008
oooh I can just imagine...seductive,yet deadly....*goosebumps*
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RoseWhipGoddess Featured By Owner May 29, 2008
Very insightful and vivid.
You said you wrote this for an ex-girlfriend?
Is the "vampire" supposed to be you?
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ValanceVampire1423 Featured By Owner May 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
thats empressive... you should write one about a vampire that has a love for a certain human. a Vampire Guy loves a human Girl... I think It would be a good one for you to write...
~V V
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lostintheshadowsx Featured By Owner May 10, 2008
wow!!! amazing poem =) its so beautiful how everything flowed perfectly. you gave an amazing image.
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little-red-rockstar Featured By Owner May 1, 2008
wow its reall goo please dont stop!
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bellacullen124 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2008
wow really good
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hsakura97 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2008
omg! you did a great job! you are an awesome poet! i am really glad you aren't stopping with this one :)
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